Thursday, 21 February 2013

Writing Exercise: Letter to Keller from Paul: Maestro by Peter Goldsworthy

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Letter Plan:

-to Keller

-doesn’t need his help

-sick of his advice

-epiphany that he isn’t as good as he wants to be, won’t be a famous pianist

-is grateful

-can now move on with his life


Herr Keller,

I would like to thank you deeply, from the bottom of my heart. Your advice to me about my work seemed irrelevant to me a couple of days ago.  I felt that you looked too deep into my work and that you didn’t seem to appreciate my work. I felt that I didn’t need a book of notes or advice every time I sent you a letter or a tape recording of myself. I just wanted you to listen to it. I didn’t want you to tell me all the bad stuff all the time. Sometimes I just wanted to get a reply where you were satisfied or at least close to satisfied. I was over-filled with anger when I sent you a tape-recording of me playing, not only to receive criticism but pages and pages full of it! After reading only the first page, I decided to chuck it in the bin. Feeling of regret over-came me, and I retrieved it to read the rest.
That’s when I knew. Playing the piano isn’t my special talent. It’s a hobby, but all my hope in becoming something grande, just vanished. Just like that. I now know that I will never become a famous pianist, because when I get negative criticism I don’t take it well and how do I expect to be great  when I can’t improve? That’s why I’m grateful… you have made me realise that I need to move on from my aspirations.
I would’ve come up north to visit you and play, days on end. However, my duties as boyfriend are more important to me. I love Rosie and I think I always will. I’ve loved playing the piano, but it’s something that I am not sure about in the future.
You were a great teacher, nothing to compare to! However, all your hard work came to rubbish, because I was just an average pianist. Maybe someday I could teach piano and teach a young child how to become truly great at playing the piano. 
I hope someday we can meet again. Thank you ever so much for everything you have taught me, and I know that I will most definitely teach your lessons to other people who want to learn. You have endured such a painful life, and everyday must’ve been a learning curve for you. That’s why you were so great and beautiful at playing the piano, because every time you played, you were your best critic and worst critic. My arrogance is stopping me from being a better pianist. I can now move on with my life, and I only have you to thank for opening my eyes to this.

All the best,
Paul Crabbe.

Friday, 8 February 2013

"My Father's Axe" Questions

My Father’s Axe by Tim Winton

Briefly summarise the story – its subject matter. The story begins in the present day, with a man who cannot find his father's axe. He then goes to describe the significance of this axe, where he describes his childhood memories. These memories consist of him learning from his dad how to chop wood. Soon chopping wood becomes a form of hobby or something that makes him relaxed or satisfied. For example, when he saw his father sobbing, he went to the back of the house and chopped some wood until his arms hurt. The story goes back and forth from past to present; of memories of the axe and his childhood to the present; where he still can't find the axe. The fact that he can't find the axe is keeping him up at night, so much that he has gruesome nightmares. These nightmares are very detailed and gruesome in the fact that they describe both him and his father being axed with body parts going everywhere. However, these dreams relate to his childhood. For example, he has a dream where his son, Jamie, axes his head into two halves and then rolls these halves down the road where cars drive over the pieces. This relates to his childhood, as he used to axe melons in half and then he would watch as the cars drove over the melons and would squish all the contents. He feels almost empty without this axe. I think that this axe has ultimately became the object which holds so many memories and so much of his past and family, both good and bad, and I think by losing this object, he has lost something so personal and so close to his heart. In the end, he goes and buys a new axe. Just as he buys it, a man and his son come and the son confesses he stole the axe. In this moment, the man goes and gets the new axe he bought and gives to the young boy who stole his axe.

How does the writer establish the relationship between father and son? The writer establishes the relationship between the father and son through the object of the axe. The axe ultimately brings them together in the first place and creates the many memories that he now has as an adult. The son looks up to his father and has great admiration for his father, "He taught me how to split wood though, I could never do it like him, those long, rhythmic, semi-circular s like a ballet dancer's warmup...". However, once he reaches adolescence, he grows embarrassed of his father's affectionate ways and he outgrows his childhood love for his father. His view towards him changes in that retrospect as well, "Sometimes he looked at me in disappointment, and sometimes I looked at him the same way...". This is evidence to show that at times their relationship had it's downs. However, it is the axe that is the conflict in this story and I think that for the young man, the axe has acted as almost a metaphorical glue between him and his father and those memories he has.

Identify the various stages in the narrative – orientation, complication/s, climax, resolution. The orientation in the beginning of the narrative is at the family home, then they all went as a family on a holiday to a beach shack at a rivermouth up north, where they went to look at the on shore reefs. Later, the young boy marries and has askn and moves back into the family home. The complications in the narrative include: the disappearance of his father's axe, his mother's death, his nightmares about his axe, his wanting to retrieve the axe so badly and his relationship with his father. The climax of the narrative is when he has all those gruesome dreams and he decides that there is nothing to do but buy a new axe, as it has caused him much heart-ache. The resolution, was ultimately buying the axe, but then the young boy and his father confess that the young boy stole his axe, when he decides to swap his new axe with his old, treasured one. In a way, I think that the young boy and his father in the end become almost a mirrored image of who he was with his father and I think that in gratification, he gives the young boy the new axe so he can have all the wonderful memories he had with the axe and with his father.

What is the importance of the axe throughout? Is it a thing of monetary value or does it have symbolic importance? Explain. I think that the axe acts as something of symbolic importance. Though out his whole childhood and adolescence life, the axe acted as something he could always turn to and was something he could let out his anger on. Ultimately, it was something of great value to him, as it also acted as a reminder of his mother and especially of his father, who he has a significant relationship with. The axe was something that both the young boy and his father had in common, they both loved to chop wood, they thrived on the feeling of seeing and feeling the wood break under the power of the axe. So I believe it was a symbol of memories within his childhood, and it acted almost as the 'glue' to his relationship with his father.
Explain the narrator’s dreams. What is their significance? The narrator's dreams are very gruesome and in much detail. His first dream, is him chopping wood with so much passion and then it appears that he is floating upwards. This angers him, as he wants to stay and chop more wood, "No, I don't want to lift up,". Soon, the axe head comes off the handle and ultimately chops his father's head off. His next dream, recalled himself dissected in all pieces. All his body parts were chopped and all over the place, despite this, he looked, "...peaceful enough, like a photograph." then he son cones along with an axe and chops his head into two halves. He then grabs his head like a bowling bowl and bowls it down the road where cars squish the remnants, until nothing was left. Although these dreams may sound gruesome to the average reader, these dreams were of significant importance to him. For example, his last dream where his son skidded his two halves of his head down the road, was something that he used to do when he was a child, but with melons, and it was something of great happiness to him. These dreams are sparking memories deep down in his head, to a time ling ago, when he was just a child. These memories are frightening him in the form of nightmares, as it is expressing the mourning of the loss of his axe. This axe has great meaning to him and now that it is gone, it has affected everything in his life.

Does the story contain a message about growing up? Identify the key values underpinning the narrative. The message contains a message about growing up, which is that, we all grow up and grow out of things that used to have great importance to us at the time, but once we are older and have a family, etc. those things come back into our lives and makes the person much more appreciative of those times/ relationships or even objects in this case. The key values in this narrative is that, you must enjoy childhood while you can, because once adolescence comes, you grow up too quickly, in want to be a 'grown-up'. Also, it expresses that you must value your relationships with the significant people in your life while you can, because when you grow up they might not be there anymore, so you have to expand your memories as much as you can, so when they are gone, you have those happy memories of when they were there in you life. Another value underpinning the narrative is that you have to appreciate everything and everyone.
Discuss the significance of the story’s ending. I believe that the ending acts as a mirror of who he used to be with his dad and the sort of passion he had within himself. The young boy obviously has an interest with the axe and so, with gratitude, he gives the young hoy the new axe, which will serve as something of great importance within the young boy's life as it was in his. I think he swapped the axe's, because there was too much of himself and of his father within the axe, and too much memories that it was so personal to him. By giving the young boy the new axe, it is almost encouraging the young boy to create special memories and relationships which will later make him appreciative of the axe when he is older. It's almost like starting a new page or new life with this axe.

Give it an alternate title. Justify your choice. An alternative title for this narrative would be, 'Never Let Me Go.' This title would be in the perspective of the axe and all the memories it with holds. Also, although the axe was gone for a while, it somehow made its way back to its owner, which shows that it will never be gone forever, but just for a short period of time. Also, it also refers to the end of the narrative, as now he has his old axe back and it is almost like an affirmation that he will never lose it again, because of how personal it is.

Wednesday, 6 February 2013

Drafted English: My Special Place

It's after school, we all start charging in, ready to attack the one who got afternoon tea. Noise quickly rises. One girl after another comes through the double doors, and everyone is greeted with boisterous excitement, as if we haven't seen each other in days. The over- used, felty couches are overflowing with girls trying to squeeze in to sit down. The afternoon light is glowing, filling the room with so much exuberance. Girls rushing past you, in a hurry to get to their afternoon sports. Others, are slouching in their spots. The TV then flicks on, making it more difficult to speak to others, so we all start talking even louder. But not as loud as we get when the afternoon tea comes. As we come to realise that "it's the gross lemon cakes," the excitement rapidly decreases. Gossip is the hot topic every afternoon. As one girl shares, others eagerly wait for their turn to share. Each story embraced with roaring laughter or utter shock. As time flies by, the kitchen table turns its glossy self into a foul space. Stench of rotting food steals into your nose. By 4.30, spoons and knives become scarce. And somehow the highly cherished Milo runs away, only to leave an empty can when it comes back. By 5, the noise is almost gone. You sit on the couch by yourself watching the TV, wanting someone to come through the door so you can have some company. You can almost hear the buzzing brains of the girls as they are doing their studies. Others, busily telling gossip or jokes. And the whole time, the common-room sat still. It sits there, whilst the space is full and when it is empty. It brings everyone together. Together as a family, because every boarder is family to me

My Special Place

It's after school, we all start charging in, ready to attack the one who got afternoon tea. Noise quickly rises. One girl after another comes through the double doors, and everyone is greeted with boisterous excitement, as if we haven't seen each other in days. The over- used, felty couches are overflowing with girls trying to squeeze in to sit down. The afternoon light is glowing, filling the room with so much exuberance. Girls rushing past you, in a hurry to get to their afternoon sports. Others, are slouching in their spots. The TV then decides to turn on, making it more difficult to speak to others, so we all start talking even louder. But not as loud as we get when the afternoon tea comes. As we come to realise that "it's the gross lemon cakes," the excitement rapidly decreases. Gossip is the hot topic every afternoon. As one girl shares, others eagerly wait for their turn to share. Each story embraced with roaring laughter or utter shock. As time flies by, the kitchen table turns its glossy self into a foul space. By 4.30, spoons and knives become scarce. And somehow the highly cherished Milo runs away, only to leave an empty can when it comes back. By 5, the noise is almost gone. You sit on the couch by yourself watching the TV, wanting someone to come through the door so you can have some company. You can almost hear the buzzing brains of the girls as they are doing their studies. Others, busily telling gossip or jokes. And the whole time, the common-room sat still. It sits there, whilst the space is full and when it is empty. It brings everyone together. Together as a family, because every boarder is family to me.

Sunday, 3 February 2013

The advertisement is positioned to view the concept of growing up through the targeted audience. The advertisement is targeted at parents who are quite well off and who have a daughter. The ad pin points the idea that teens are vulnerable, lazy and are party goers. The use of "you" and "your" is targeted at the daughters parents. The ad is trying to make the parents over protective, by "throwing" the ideas in the parents face that growing up is dangerous, through the use of drugs and alcohol. The parents are then advised to guide their teens life by,